Draft 1
When I see that grade,
I can't help but smile
because that grade beams of future.
vendredi 18 mars 2011
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Alicia,
The moment is quite clear in this poem.
The word "that" seems ineffective in its repetition in such a short poem. Can you play around with that and see what you come up with?
Take a look at the "Cut to the Bone" lesson as well. There are some things that could be removed to make the poem stronger.
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